Peer response for Andrea Egidos García

By: Ángela Campoy Valverde

Dear Andrea from my point of view, your topic sentence is a bit short, so I don't see with clearness what you want to say. According to the text, I can see good supporting sentences. You have donea description giving specific details about your mum. Talking about length of the paragraph, I can say that it is long enough. The development of the text, the supporting sentences, have a good extension. At the end of the paragraph, I can't seea concluding sentence closing and summing up the text, there is a final sentence but it is too short, and that's not a resume. In short, the whole text is correct, I can only see a few mistakes which I have said before.


 Describe someone

In my opinion, every person has an example, the mine is one person that I love so much, my mother.She has so many things that I would have...First, she has a cheerful personality and she is a very good person. When someone of my family has a problem she always try to help us and she worries so much for us. The best of her is that she want to help the rest, although it isn't our family. She is the typical person who if she sees to someone that needs help at street, she does all  she can for that person. Also she is a very good cook and she often teachs cook to me. 
I know she will be whenever I need her and besides she will never dissapoint me because she is my best friend!